Here is her rough draft which I added some comments to:
Project 1 Draft
And here is the project rubric I created for her rough draft:
Project 1 Rubric
McPhee, Nic. Editing a Paper. 1/26/2008 via Flickr. Creative Commons License.
After reviewing this draft by Gabby, I realized that I still have quite of work to do to my own project to get it up to par with a good QRG. Although her draft was rather rough as well, she was able to include a lot more imagery in her writing than I included on mine and I really liked the way that spoke to the reader. I definitely still need to add a lot of "meat" to my project, but then after I have done that, I need to edit it for imagery and other the ability to really capture the reader. It shouldn't just all be facts facts facts.
Gabby's Mistakes:
Gabby's Successes:
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